great audio track and some great footage, but as with everything there’s room for improvement. i think the main thing you want to avoid mixing long shots of singing or fret work with the music. it leaves the viewer unsettled when it doesn’t match up. if you’re going to go with the montage (which i think is the way to go) i’d try to mix in more face shots, crowd shots and off angles.
take a look at 00:12-00:16. there’s a shot of you with your hand in the air and a big grin on your face and then a cool angle of the guitar necks. those few seconds really work. they give a real personal feel and you don’t have to worry about the music mismatch. (02:13-02:30 is similar in that respect).
i think if you had some crowd shots, and maybe some shots of you guys goofing around in a practice room, it would give it a smoother feel and add a lot more personality to it.
otherwise its great. very cool song. some really nice footage. well done.